Lahore is a wonderful place, but eventually I had to move on. I am now living in Brooklyn. It is cold, it is different. Brooklyn is nothing like Lahore but somehow I seem to enjoy it quite a bit and the more I'm here the more I love it.
But how can I move on from my first love so fast?
Sometimes I question myself; however, New York is different, it's beautiful, it is unique, it has air that I just fall in love with.
It is almost like a rebound from my one love, or maybe it is true love, the kind that is meant to be. I am in love with the city, the smell, the people, everything about New York makes me curious and I love it. Maybe I found a new love, or my real true love.
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The voice of the author was half captured as she included the word love which makes the audience understand that the place is described as a person that gives the author emotion towards it. However, more description should have been made when talking about the place like ow the air is different which makes it fall in love with it.
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