Oslo, Norway
In the heart of Scandinavia, I was greeted by the most beautiful winter. Through my multiple layers of clothing, I could still feel the embrace of mother Winter. Despite the cold, the atmosphere made me feel cozy and warm: like I belonged there.
The crunch of the blanketed snow beneath my feet as I navigate the winding streets of the Capital meshed well with the vibrant sounds of city life. Though I couldn't understand the chatter, the greetings and friendliness displayed by the locals made the city feel welcoming as I made my way to Neseblod Record Shop.
Through my nostrils ran the scent of family owned cafes and the scent of fireplaces burning in the Winter. I could taste the air with each inhale of the clean city air. If you ever want to feel at home, visit Oslo, for a rich history and a beautiful atmosphere.
This was a great travel blog, you can feel the author's admiration of Norway and its culture evidently. They describe the sounds heard and the visuals of a stroll through Oslo. The only area for improvement, to compare to the Lahore author, would be to describe a specific area or areas of attachment.
ReplyDelete- The writer uses active voice and it feels like the author of Lahore is writing it.
ReplyDelete- The writer could have been more specific on some areas of the city.
- The blog elements are present and they have a strong purpose.
I like how you captured the techniques of a blog like structure by making multiple, short paragraphs. I also like how you expressed your writing in active voice. I really liked when you said "the crunch of the blanketed snow beneath my feet...." because it captured imagery and I felt like I was there. I enjoyed your blog and I do not think you could have done anything better.
ReplyDeleteI think you captured the voice of the author really well I felt you could've make it sound like home a little bit more to fit the prompt. I liked all the imagery and I liked the informality of it.
ReplyDeleteI like how the techniques are established in the blog. You expressed a lot of active voice and established other well techniques.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading you're blog and i think nothing can change to make this blog.
The author truly captivated active voice when describing the scenery. The advanced language used for the imagery.
ReplyDeleteThe short paragraph structure captivates the reader into the text.
Travel blog structure.
Great imagery and language, maybe a little more description but great job
ReplyDeleteThe author captured the technique perfectly as it can be shown in the article through active voice. Very well thought out and wrote in general. The things you can improve are to describe areas that have some sort of attachment to you
ReplyDeleteThis was written very well. You wrote it very similarly to the author, and you still used the blog elements.
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