Lahore, she was my home for a stretch. I understood her traits well, however as my perception of her changed I realized I needed to find a new home. I made my way to Las Vegas and stayed there for the next three years. He was a totally new and exciting friend to me.
As Lahore started to change I felt as if I needed to open a new chapter in my life. I turned from the love I had for other cities and looked for friends. This is where Las Vegas showed me how it felt to be alive, by showing me new ways of living.
Most of my days with him consisted of endless cold nights out partying or hanging out at the casino. Those cold nights soon turned into dry and hot days, waking through the sounds of traffic and people from the last night still awake.
It did capture writers voice as you used he and she for the places just like the author.
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Good elements.
I think this person did use the voice of the other blog. Something they can improve on is maybe talking more about their time in LA and not about their time in Lahore, try to move past that and talk about their new life.
ReplyDeleteYou wrote about the same place as the original but writing on Las Vegas more than Lahore could definitely help improve this essay. Great job overall!
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