With the cold dry wind breezing through my face and hair, I could not believe my eyes. As soon as I arrived in Vail, Colorado I fell in love at first sight. The beautiful, snowy-peaked, humongous mountains covered the horizon and went as far as the eyes can see. I could feel the altitude as it was a lot harder to breath air. As I flew down the mountain on my snowboard, I could hear the joyful screams of the children in the park, and the whoosh of the wind as I sped through the trees. From the top of the mountain you could see the whole city of Vail. From the night lights to the food and drinks, there was not a second I was not enjoying myself. You could smell the pine trees so vividly and it made me very happy to know that it is almost Christmas.
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Very good imagery that is used to make the audience enjoy reading this passage. Needs more literary devices used to keep the audiences attention . Use voice of Lahore more frequently.
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