Citadel is absolutely beautiful; from the aging concrete and rigid structure of the building to the aging artifacts inside such as cannons and cannonballs used in battle.
The vivid, green, and grassy landscape viable from the top of the building is astonishing. An immense amount of trees covering the ground below, tall buildings in the distance, old historical buildings around Citadel, and clouds! So many dense, soft white clouds filled the air because of how high you are. The subtle gust of wind that passes by your ear seems like the clouds are trying to speak to you calmly as you admire the view.
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1. The writer did indeed capture voice/technique well. She managed to implement a lot of adjectives and a third person POV.
ReplyDelete2. The writer could have listened to the maximum word count limit of 150.
3. Blog elements she presented were an explanatory tone that allowed for a good understanding of Haiti.
Your blog posts provides many blog posts which shows your understanding. I think it is interesting how you gave specific details about how the new environment looks like, this gives the reader a clear image of what the narrator sees. I think next time you should provide more detail about what the narrator feels after leaving Lahore.
ReplyDelete1. your blog post was great:)) I loved how you managed to capture the beauty of Citadel
ReplyDelete2. I think you could have maybe elaborated more on the feelings of the narrator
3. LOTS of imagery, first person.