Walking down Melrose Avenue I could hear the busy streets of cars and the honk of cars that were heading into traffic. LA has been my home now for 5 years and everyday people still surprise me with their fashion and likes. Today, I went into a "trendy" coffee shop called "Alfreds". I purchased a curvaceous crescent-shaped croissant and a decaf latte. I sat on the round table and worked on a few emails and work that had to be done. As I was working, I started to look around at the people sitting down around me. There was a man sitting who smelled like old french vanilla cologne and was drinking an iced coffee latte which watered my mouth.
As I continued my walk down melrose road, Here Comes The Sun by the Beatles started playing which reminded me of my childhood in Lahore, this song was one that my brothers and I used to sing together and it meant a lot to me. But now that I was in LA in this new environment hearing that song made me reminisce of my childhood. I had missed Lahore but LA was my new home and I was loving it.
the writer did capture voice technique really well. They used all elements that established in the head.
ReplyDeletethe writer could've established more imagery and make it seem as if its more in the scene.
I would annotate how the pages annotate to establish all the techniques.