I leave my lobby and feel the cool air. A flash of yellow taxis drive into my peripheral, the energy of joggers as they run past me give me a rush of adrenaline. The hustle of New York has a special place in my heart. I’ve lived here my whole life, I’ve played in Square Park with my family as kids, I’ve moved apartments a gazillion amount of time, but I’ll never find it in my heart to leave.
It is now September, the weather is getting chillier. As I walk the blocks, I noticed the spikes of icy cold air on my face, and the falling of seasonal leaves leave me wishing Halloween would come quicker. I walk the busy sidewalks of the city never missing for a second that I was somewhere else.
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I love the atmosphere of this writing piece. The description of New York as a "hustle" puts the vibrancy of the city in wonderful terms. I believe the writer should have elaborated on their senses more to really draw me into the atmosphere further. The desires of the writer are palpable and give the article it's drive.
ReplyDeleteMadison this blog post is great! I was able to vividly picture New York and its weather. The transition between the lobby and the busy air was a great technique.
ReplyDeleteThis author did an amazing job of including elements of explaining and describing what it is like being in New York but at the same time also included aspects of reminiscing and going further into what the city means to them.
ReplyDeleteThe author used many different literary elements, which really brought this all together. You can truly feel the nostalgia and their feelings through the screen. Great job!
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