Friday, November 19, 2021

A Snow Day in Santa Fe, New Mexico.

 On the morning of December 24th, I awoke to the bright light of the sun reflecting on the 2-foot tall snow mound that was visible through my french doors. I got up from my bed and proceeded to lift the duvet covers off of my body. Instantly, my body heat that was protected by the duvet covers escaped. I shivered and walked to my closet to put on a hooded jacket. I looked at the view of my backyard from the screen door, and realized, it was a snow day! School had been canceled due to the extreme amount of snowfall that occurred the night before. I turned to my mother and asked her to invite my best friend, Micaela, to our house to build snowmen. She replied, "Of course, however, eat your breakfast." I sat at the table, and laid upon was an assortment of croissants, macaroons, and beignets. A strong vanilla smell aired out from the table. I ate my food and proceeded to change into my snow pants, and my snow jacket. Lastly, I put on my ski socks and gloves. Soon, Micaela arrived at my house. As soon as she arrived we walked to the door that leads to the backyard. A blast of cold, dry air, had blown into our faces. We closed the door, and walked outside, and started collecting balls of snow that we rolled in the snow to create a 1-foot tall snowball...

3 comments:

  1. Very descriptive writing style! Sante Fe sounds like a beautiful place to be while its snowing.

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  2. The use of imagery is good, but this doesn't look like something the author would've written. The only things I would add is to try and sound more like the author and maybe make it more like a blog by talking to your audience.

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  3. There is a lot of imagery and description, but I think there could have been more detail on the sensations, for example, how the hood jacket felt on your skin and how warmth started to fill up your body. Or how the food stated. This piece is very narrative and with a very bright tone that makes it joyful to read.

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