Lahore was my home, until it wasn’t. It changed, the feeling wasn’t the same, but I will never forget the memories and emotions I felt in Lahore. I will always be thankful for the happiness Lahore provided me with, but I have to move on and find my new home.
I rented a new apartment in Seattle. A new setting will be beneficial for me. As I felt the rich air blow on my face I knew that this would be my place, everyone was extremely outgoing, they made me feel welcomed. As days went by, I started feeling like I fit in, I made friends at work and we went out to the city on the weekends. Seattle is now my home and I love it but Lahore became part of me and I will never forget the experiences in my true home.
I like how I can feel the emotional tone you expressed in your writing nd I like how you incorporated short sentences in your writing as well long sentences. I think you could've expressed more imagery in your writing about the city and talk more about what you saw, but overall good job.
ReplyDeleteI think you effectively emulated the author's voice. I could feel the nostalgic tone like he uses in the original article, and all the descriptions of the new city were written well. I only think you could have used more figurative language but other than that it's great.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used the same voice as the author. The nostalgic tone with which you wrote the blog with was effective and you expressed the feeling in your writing efficiently. However, the only thing I would add is more description on the setting and imagery but other than that the blog was well written.
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