I leave my beach cabana and step outside. The salty air and ocean breeze overwhelm me. This is paradise. While I've only been here for a short time, this Island and its people feel like home to me.
It's July in Punta Cana, Dominican Republic. The sun warms my skin and upbeat music fill my ears. Latin food and happy people can be found in every corner of town.
While I long for my family and Lahore, it's been easy to make friends and have connections here on this island. Down the street from where I've been staying, there's a cafe. As the sun peeks through my window every morning, I awaken to the smell of fresh coffee and pastries. I've fallen in love. I hold the community feeling and nostalgia close to my heart. Theres so much to see here. Every block has different smells, sights, and noises.
This blog effectively captured the writer's technique and voice. It used a lot of imagery in describing the new city. Readers would definitely be able to picture themselves there. It also had an attention grabbing title and short paragraphs as blogs should have.
ReplyDeleteThe writer has a unique voice that adds to the reading of this article. The tone and descriptive writing make the city seem very appealing to the reader. The short paragraphs are in the correct form of a blog but I would dedicate more time to the place then the feeling it evokes.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job capturing the voice of the author by using similar writing techniques. A lot of description and feelings were put forward and that created a connection to the actual passage. Overall, I think that you met all the requirements and if you wanted to improve it you should make it longer by describing feeling mentioned in the original blog post.
ReplyDeleteMaybe a bit more in depth analysis but amazing job with everything else
ReplyDeleteThis entry does a great job of describing Punta Cana, in practically every sense. There really isn't that much to say about it. The author really captured the original author's voice, and allows the reader to visually see Punta Cana.
ReplyDeleteThe blog successfully describes the setting and the voice of the author. The writer's technique was well written which made the blog more engaging. The form of the blog is well structured, however I would've described and gotten more in depth in the description on the feeling of the setting.
ReplyDeleteYou did an excellent job of capturing the author's voice by employing similar writing skills. There was a lot of description and feelings expressed, which helped to link the text to the reader. Overall, I believe you met all of the criteria, and if you wanted to improve it, you could lengthen it by explaining the feelings described in the original blog post.
ReplyDeleteThe author did an excellent job in portraying the voice of the author in Lahore. Elements were used which makes the blog descriptive and full of examples that make the audience understand better. The title is also name calling which attracts attention from the readers. Overall, I think the author made a great job with trying to imitate the style of writing from the author of Lahore.
ReplyDeleteI think the writer achieved relating this text to the original author's voice by making reference to "home." The description of the "salty " and other sensorial examples make me feel as if I was present in that destination. For that reason, I think this writer did a pretty good job. Something that could be improved is the vivid imagery as part of the text and vital characteristic of a blog, maybe adding more detailed explanation of the destination, as specific colors instead of a just sights, noises, etc.
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